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6A3

曾爾樂

Tsang Yi Lok

My Wonderful Day


Today is a wonderful Saturday morning. Kenny and I went to a charity and to help sell flags to raise money. We went to different places and we sold red flags to the people. Some gave us a tip because they supported the charity. At noon, we returned all the money and the flags that we did not sell back to the charity. We gave the workers the money and they gave us some toys.
After helping the charity, we went to eat at the famous fast food restaurant, Five Guys and we enjoyed it very much. When we were chatting and eating, I looked at my toys and phone and they were gone. Kenny and I quickly finished our meals and searched for our bags. We were so scared that we would not get our things back.

We went to the office of the mall and asked them if they had found our bags. They went in and checked. Luckily someone found our bags and we went home happily. “This was a fun but scary day,” said Kenny and I agreed. We both knew that good things came to people who did good deeds.

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Teacher’s comment:

Your story of losing the flag bags is interesting with some good ideas. Annie and Kenny were careless when they were selling flags for the charity. You wrote a happy ending, too!
For language, please be reminded to use correct tense and connectives There are mistakes in vocabulary, grammar, spelling, capitalization and punctuation.
The ideas of the story are logically organized! You are a really good writer. Keep it up in your creative work!

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