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伍恩雅
Ng Yan Nga Enya
Saving Santa
The alert came over the radio, “Emergency! Santa Claus is trapped in a chimney. Christmas will likely be canceled”. As soon as I head it I knew I would have to do something and do it fast. I quickly gathered my gear and headed out the door.
I quickly asked my friend, Timmy, who is an expert on computers, to track Santa’s location and rushed there. As soon as I got out of my car, a little girl asked, “Are you here to help?” I nodded, feeling the weight of the situation. With her directions, I reached the house and climbed up to the narrow chimney. Inside, I could hear Santa’s muffled voice.
I didn’t know what to do. Santa was stuck and I knew that I couldn’t get him out myself. But then, my friend Emma arrived just in time. “I heard the radio!” she said, ready to assist. Together, we decided on a plan! I lowered myself into the chimney, with a flashlight in hand, and spotted Santa wedged tightly inside.
“Santa! I’m here to help!” I called. With Emma guiding from above, we carefully maneuvered him out, using the rope to pull him free. Finally, he slipped out, covered in soot but grinning.
“Ho, Ho, Ho! Thank you!” He exclaimed. With the night saved, Santa climbed aboard his sleigh. As he took off, I felt the true spirit of Christmas alive in the air!!
Teacher’s comment:
You really have the potential to be a creative writer! You describe very well the process to save Santa who was trapped in the chimney! The story is complete and creative with a happy ending!
For the grammar, you definitely did a good job! Your sentence structures are good with lots of vocabulary and adjectives to describe the feeling of the characters.
For organization, the sentences are fluent and clear! Keep up your fabulous work!
Wish you a Merry Christmas!